Walter Bowne
Nov 17, 2023

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Suggestion: Use subordination here. Halo gets lost. Above Delroy’s silhouette, the fog and the sunlight created an eerie halo.

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Walter Bowne
Walter Bowne

Written by Walter Bowne

This “trophy husband” writes fiction, poetry, narrative non-fiction, travel essays, music essays, book reviews, and essays about his belly button.

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